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I'm yours


Author: MysterydarkPoet
ASL Info:    20/f/Aust
Elite Ratio:    3.13 - 157 /295 /173
Words: 34
Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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Description:




I'm yours



Expanding blue beauty
Won't you look at me?
Calm and soothingly
Entice me in,
& Swallow me whole-
Taste my hurt & filth.
Cradle my love & will.
I'm yours, 
If anyones at all. 




Submitted on 2010-03-27 04:25:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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