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    dots Submission Name: His majestydots
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    Author: MysterydarkPoet
    ASL Info:    20/f/Aust
    Elite Ratio:    3.13 - 157/295/173
    Words: 159
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    Even my own house 
    Doesn't feel like home
    Each corner hides my shame
    Holds my sorrow,
    Cradles my pain.
    & so I try.
    I can run, but I can't hide.

    So I'll close my eyes,
    beg for a different tomorrow
    & paint it all
    Different variations of blue
    Colour and blur my eyes
    To seeing only you.
    But a mirror won't lie,
    Just sink a heavy heart-
    & so i can run, but I can't hide.

    Each lampost
    Each street
    Each tree
    Each home.
    A washed out grey.
    Every word,
    Sounds the same.
    But still I run,
    To find a haven from such pain
    But oh, if such a place existed
    I don't think it would want me at all-
    Because I'm nothing,
    If anything at all.

    Just let it fall.
    From high upon your shelf
    Let it spill,
    Soak and stain.
    Cause you're so proud,
    A king of your own game-
    You've let my colour drain.




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