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    dots Submission Name: Flying is too fast.dots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 107
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Nature
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    dotsFlying is too fast.dots
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    nothing is in tune with this thought and the curve of his
    ass
    my hands are stretched, not for the sky
    but the wooden floors and the cement highways and the dirt underneath the sea.

    Let me down from here!
    I scream
    And hear voices all around me,
    talking to
    themselves and each other as if I didn't exist

    I am not as angry about this as I would have been
    But still a little unnerved by that I would be insecure at all.

    That is, if I am going to be flying
    I would like to just float.




    Submitted on 2010-03-27 07:17:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This definitely would have been better suited off under poetry, not lyrics. I honestly didnt know what the point of this piece was, but it made me think of something morbid. Im sure that wasnt the intention.
    | Posted on 2010-05-08 00:00:00 | by hybridsongwrite | [ Reply to This ]


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