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    dots Submission Name: Dark Night (Part III)dots
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    Author: WhatYouWill
    Elite Ratio:    5.75 - 65/76/35
    Words: 67
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    Description:
       Inspired by the book Night by Elie Wiesel.
    The third installment of the Dark Night Triptych.


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    dotsDark Night (Part III)dots
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    these Germans play make-believe like little children
    blond Aryan suns in their hair
    blue Aryan dawns that curl in their eyes

    but all I see are black midnight boots
    and shining silver stars that fly from guns
    pale moons with swollen tongues
    that hang from the gallows

    even with my eyes open to the daytime sky
    my life is made of the darkest of nights




    Submitted on 2010-03-27 19:15:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      SPECIAL GROUP BIRTHDAY COMMENT!!!!

    Emily: Great, Scout! Really good job!

    Me: What do you want to say? What's your comment, Grace?

    Grace: I don't know.

    Sophie: My hair shines like suns. Spooooon.

    Me: Ooo-kay. Anyways I like the continuation of the sky/celestial imagery even as the focus shifts from light to dark. The juxtaposition crystallizes in the last "couplet" (pair of lines even though it doesn't rhyme so I can call it that right). Excellente.
    | Posted on 2010-05-01 00:00:00 | by Hecate | [ Reply to This ]


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