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    dots Submission Name: comatosedots
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    Author: MINTPATTY
    Elite Ratio:    2.47 - 18/2/7
    Words: 249
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 609
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    Bytes: 1576



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    dotscomatosedots
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    laughter echos in my mind
    everytime i try to unwind
    this unbindable bind
    look under a rock and you'll find
    what's left of this heart of mine
    even eyes that shine
    like yours did that one time
    still lie
    there was a time in your arms i believed i could fly
    but now there's not even a sky
    im flooded out with rain
    insanity is all that i've regained
    tell me that im stupid and point yer finger
    then loose it
    show you my dreams you shoot them
    down
    down tha drain like a chemical spill
    in this lab thats filled
    with spontanious prescription pills for all kinds of emotional philocophical skills
    this pain i feel
    inside its reeled
    outside its spilled
    for your entertainment
    my payment
    for just wishing that one time you could just stop absorbsion of self
    pretend to care
    take your balls of the shelf
    stop and stare
    was that your pride that flared
    when yer insecurities i blared
    your obscurities i shared with you
    and reality you felt
    what i've been feeling ever since tha day we met
    some self revelation
    yeah i bet
    hang yourself in the closet i spect
    why wont you just come out the closet
    and deep throat this faucet
    filled with all yer liquid convulsion of inequities
    like an explosion
    news flash no need to prospone it
    your chance with me
    blown it




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