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    dots Submission Name: Angry Young Mandots
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    Author: Mithrandir
    ASL Info:    28/m/N.Y.
    Elite Ratio:    4.62 - 452/681/113
    Words: 107
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
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    dotsAngry Young Mandots
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    I was the angry young man
    full moons come and go
    tides change
    reflections evolve

    Now I'm just angry
    now I'm just...

    Dead skin falls away
    without a warning
    years pass us by
    love lays wasted
    at the way side

    I was the angry young man
    now white hair
    replaces brown
    reflections evolve
    but if you stare long enough

    A dreams still in my eyes
    A dream...


    I was the angry young man


    Now I'm just angry


    Can never be so young again
    but at least I know
    it's alright to be happy
    it's alright...




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      I like the connection between nature and universal law, such as you demonstrated with the lines that compare the man to the seasons and cycles of different aspects of life. You brought up the tides and that was also a good use of imagery. I thought those things, combined with the personal concept of emotions and aging for lack of a better word, made this piece really well written
    | Posted on 2015-11-01 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      This confused me slightly. Was this about the journal of being a spiteful kid to "blissvile" and then to that runt again?

    Maybe? It left me with that expression, but I can't say that's for sure, cause I am confuse.

    Now, I understand what you meant by "I was the angry young man".

    When I grew up, I hated the world for many private reasons. I was full of spite, and I really was anti-social.

    So, I can relate there my friend.

    Well, other than your poem reminded me of my younger youth (I'm still too young to relate fully to this. haha >.>) it was pretty good.

    Thanks for sharing
    | Posted on 2010-03-30 00:00:00 | by Dark Dann | [ Reply to This ]


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