Description: Well, I am not real happy with this one, not sure...
A Settling of Scores -------------------------------------------
Words of hate struck my heart
I remained silent far too long
Believing I was nothing
Deserving of it all
Your dealings, slowly killing
I am resilient, you see
Thought I would forget
I do not know the meaning of this
For you I will not learn, revenge is my quest
Come over here and prepare to feel it all
You are the reason for this jaded soul
I am ready for you, hit me now and witness
Your own deserving death
Someone is certainly showing her meanie side in this! I like I like! It's speaking to my mood right now, so I'm keeping it close. Again, you write with feel, and that's something I admire you for. Anger is a pretty cool emotion when you write the way you do. Congrats.
The vengeance aspect of the write has the feel of an ambush, laying in wait to assail the one whom you hope to wound beyond healing. It is this hatred and loathing that will bring no healing to the wounded one who penned these words.
I really like the first stanza. I think you should take that last line and expand upon it more. I think you have some good ideas in the last stanza, but you need to maybe refine it some more. I hope to see a revised version, but I enjoyed the read.
that is really one wicked poem.i hope you get what you want from those people you come across in life because,i for one,sure wouldn't want to be on the receiving end of that anger and hatred,beautiful though it is.well done.
I was listening to the song In Keeping Secrets of Silent Earth 3 (on album by same name) By Coheed And Cambria when I read this. I must say that the poem and the song are just truly and seemlessly flowing together for me. It's like one is amplifying the other, I dunno whatever. I liked the style very much. Bele is such a cool poet what can you say really. Oh yeah one typo in there in the second line 1st stanza
that "far to" should have probably been "too"
but whatever not really noticable, maybe worth corecting for perfections sake but not really effecting overall style or reading.
P.S. That dark angel photo is killer, symbolism is uncanny with the poem to me. Also shes pretty sexy.