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Final Victory, Sweet Redemption

Author: S.A.M.
ASL Info:    26/f/xx
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Class/Type: Poetry /Gothic
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Take what you want from it, let me know what that is please.
Yes D.C. I read your post, you were my inspiration.

Final Victory, Sweet Redemption

Romeo was bleedin in fair somewhere
And Juliet stood laughing
Cause she could see his fear.
The stained glass depicts the scene
An old familiar pain
Wounded Romeo, the sadist masochist
Dying crimson the altar floor.
Fornification made into a sacred vow
Which he could not partake.

Smoking roses smoldered in Juliet’s pale hands
The fire of her soul once reduced to ash
Now burns eternal with blue white flame.
Never to be his
Her compassion now cold as his premature tomb
Just as HE was never to be hers.

And this is the true story of the tragic star crossed lovers
Romeo murdered at Juliet’s blade
For the crimes he made of her innocents and dignity
Death better than return to this darkness
The poison kissing softly her sweet lips
She takes her last breath and softly laughs

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  Now that's a very original take on the dynamic of the classic story. Perhaps this Juliet is a modernist-feminist. Quite engaging. Thanks for sharing 👌
| Posted on 2014-02-08 00:00:00 | by CrypticBard | [ Reply to This ]

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