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    dots Submission Name: Final Victory, Sweet Redemption dots
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    Author: S.A.M.
    ASL Info:    26/f/xx
    Elite Ratio:    3.78 - 476/419/137
    Words: 169
    Class/Type: Poetry/Gothic
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    dotsFinal Victory, Sweet Redemption dots
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    Romeo was bleedin in fair somewhere
    And Juliet stood laughing
    Cause she could see his fear.
    The stained glass depicts the scene
    An old familiar pain
    Wounded Romeo, the sadist masochist
    Dying crimson the altar floor.
    Fornification made into a sacred vow
    Which he could not partake.

    Smoking roses smoldered in Julietís pale hands
    The fire of her soul once reduced to ash
    Now burns eternal with blue white flame.
    Never to be his
    Her compassion now cold as his premature tomb
    Just as HE was never to be hers.

    And this is the true story of the tragic star crossed lovers
    Romeo murdered at Julietís blade
    For the crimes he made of her innocents and dignity
    Death better than return to this darkness
    The poison kissing softly her sweet lips
    She takes her last breath and softly laughs
    Goodbye.




    Submitted on 2010-03-29 00:01:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Now that's a very original take on the dynamic of the classic story. Perhaps this Juliet is a modernist-feminist. Quite engaging. Thanks for sharing ūüĎĆ
    | Posted on 2014-02-08 00:00:00 | by CrypticBard | [ Reply to This ]


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