Interesting write, my friend. Obviously an emotional work of a desperate cry for the end. Don't we all want that though, some way to escape from the pain that dwindles within us? The painful wind that seems to try to disturb that fire within us? Yeah. I've been there. Not quite out of it, but been there none the less.
There are some things I'd like to point out. Because of the rhyme, there are places where you cut the line short and it just seemed to ruin the balance for me. It's the one flaw of rhyming, and it really ticks me off sometimes. But that is one thing I had to point out.
Like this one:
"Dry out all of these
Oceans of hurt
Take it from me now
Before it starts to stir"
It just didn't get to me, and even the rhyme ain't total here either. I would have added another clever imagery, or a change of wording. But that is the only thing I wanted to point out.
Don't get me wrong, the piece was good. but just that.
All I can tell you is to keep your head up. Things get better. Keep up the good work my friend