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    dots Submission Name: Sirendots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 252
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
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    dotsSirendots
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    Upon the salted rock
    A steady seasoned foot
    And if ankles could speak of beckoning
    Yet still dream of escaping
    She is by the waves in chains
    Shackled to a dream of freedom

    Through the dark and days of rolling breakers
    Has her song meandered
    Call to the horizon her forsaken beauty
    Where she by wish would wish to be
    Other than this acquiescent prison
    Of salted rock and seasoned foot

    A lover once, upon the crest
    He braved the ragged wretched crags
    In a fragile barque rowed by promises
    Close enough to see the teeth
    And feel the keel of his life outreached
    To dare against the pitiless rocks

    Salted rock
    And seasoned foot

    But pleading holds a pale white heart
    Beating only in its dream of warmth
    Her sailor is wished to distant shores
    Where he will pine and die forever more
    Having heard the lure
    The empty song of the Siren

    She weeps upon the salted rock
    Weeps upon the seasoned foot
    And in her dreams he is sailing still
    A freedoms wish to be beside her
    But there in the depths beneath the cliffs
    With the pale seaweed hair he waits

    And the only beat of a solitary heart
    Echoed in the constant waves
    A pounding song of acquiescent prison
    She sings for the next mariner who will listen
    To a tale of salted rock
    And a well seasoned foot










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