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    dots Submission Name: Webdots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 306
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    You can be introduced into barren loneliness
    As if you where an orchid
    As some overture you always remembered
    Were sounding with a sonar
    Deep into the unfathomable depths of your heart, you are

    And as a solitary fly
    You tend to ignore the stickiness of the trap
    Careening straight in
    All exuberance
    And forgetting how you can so easily be, switched off

    Sucked out
    Is how these flies end their life
    Spiders are vampires

    You can hear the excuse of the distance between us
    And funny how
    They never want to stay friends
    And the horizon is and already was
    A dream

    Thatís how it is, in the web

    Carnivores devouring their own sense of self worth
    As if bleeding, could save them
    But at least they can pretend
    On the web
    To be something

    And there you are buzzing quiet happily
    There you go through the inter-complexity
    Of radio signal and satellite connectivity
    Happy little fly
    Albeit happily electronically

    Until, suddenly
    This hungry red mist of beauty
    Calls you with a parachute
    And you giggle, jiggle acting stupidly bashful
    While the silken threads
    Of cyber sex
    Lure you into their deep dark hole
    And there
    Devour you

    Losing control
    Getting involved
    Until you realise you fooled yourself
    Fooled yourself into thinking it was real
    And love could span a million miles
    Until your heart could swell
    And leap oceans

    But no


    Silly boy

    You were just a toy

    Silly you, silly me

    That you have to, once again realise
    That the illusion
    Is more painful
    Than the truth
    and the truths reality

    And you
    You are just a photograph
    A voice
    A momentary fly
    Stuck in the web
    And spiders are vampires

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