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    dots Submission Name: Be Quietdots
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    Author: istalkmurdoch
    Elite Ratio:    7.06 - 129/48/25
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 676
    Average Vote:    3.0000
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    Description:
       I wrote this after my ears were still ringing :/ never fun, but it made me feel better.

    What could make it better tho?


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    dotsBe Quietdots
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    my ears hurt
    when you raise your voice
    I shouldn't have to listen
    but I have no other choice

    your anger is pointless
    based on nothing real
    your blowing up
    because of what you feel

    I'm not angry at you
    that's something I'd rather not be
    not being angry
    is making me free

    I could be angry
    at so many other things
    that have happened over the years
    but peace is what solemness brings

    I know your not happy
    everyone can tell
    but that's no reason
    to make your life hell

    so for now I'll be quiet
    enjoying my life
    while you tare yours down
    with all of this strife







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      I can relate to this, my dad was like that it is why I am so glad I am no loner living with him! I have had a few people like that in school too but I think we all do. I kinda over look it all and just go on with my life at lease I know I can make my life better! I really like this poem though it relates to a lot of people good work.
    | Posted on 2010-11-24 00:00:00 | by paulsanctuary | [ Reply to This ]
      My dad is like that.... raises his voice makes his "point" but what I hate the most is when they yell and you get the point but they keep going.
    | Posted on 2010-05-04 00:00:00 | by SammySueYou | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey Ilike this one too, whaddaya know :) the positive choice is always the best one to make even when it's hard at times. But in the end it's our happiness and peace that reward us for taking the high ground
    | Posted on 2010-05-03 00:00:00 | by all2rest | [ Reply to This ]
      That's like my kids feel when I'm in a bad mood and try to talk to them. Doesn't work any good, and they feel just like that!

    abcb gets boring when repeated simply, just like abac! - just my personal opinion.
    | Posted on 2010-04-11 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]
      NICE! Great work, i cant rhym.... but this it a wonderful write. i have nothing to offer. its great as is.


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    | Posted on 2010-04-01 00:00:00 | by BusterLILblock | [ Reply to This ]
      Very well written. The rhyme is good, and the whole thing flows very well indeed.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2010-03-30 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]


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