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    dots Submission Name: Top Heavy (Weighing On My Mind)dots
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    Author: AeThe Lost Poet
    ASL Info:    19/M/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 147/184/122
    Words: 138
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsTop Heavy (Weighing On My Mind)dots
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    I"m always top heavy,
    though i never lean ova
    always read to strike swift,
    forever the king cobra,
    always in alarm, when he bringer her harm
    when she sing her song,
    my reaction comes like how when
    there's ping there's pong
    my mind's in/ dived in/
    never been so enlivened
    tremors size was seizmic,
    Efforts, thoughts, I'v tried it
    pressures brought these levels to shake-
    I'm top heavy of late
    my mind race/
    hot ready to plate
    and i know these times spread her thin,
    over time, fettered in,
    efforts was worth meddlin'
    head pressure and excedrin
    etcetera....
    etcetera....

    God, knows that she's never(self)
    Pressures get the best of her.....
    etcetera....
    etcetera....




    Submitted on 2010-03-30 13:41:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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