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    dots Submission Name: Catch Medots

    Author: LRRolins
    ASL Info:    17/A/A world you dont own
    Elite Ratio:    5.37 - 142/140/84
    Words: 161
    Class/Type: Prose/Longing
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       I wrote this in class,so it is a little force. I rather don't like it. Thoughts?

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    dotsCatch Medots

    Looking over the edge of Life's most perilous cliff,
    you've done pushed me over it.
    You,only you - my most dangerous obsession, could do that.
    Cunningly,you act as if you had no clue.
    Oh,but you do.
    THis little court jester knows your tricks,
    my Liege.
    I just acted the part to get you to stay
    ...at least for another second.

    Falling,falling- all I see,
    is the ocean waves that are you.
    I'm screaming,
    I know it's way too late
    to pur my heart out upon your dissapointed toes.
    But maybe you can spare a second more,
    only a second more
    as I let myself fall.

    I lied when I blamed you,
    but I won't lie now.
    Off this cliff,
    I fly into the unkown
    and I hope to God your arms are open when I reach the rocks at the end.
    If not,
    I'm afraid
    that I can't go on without you.

    Submitted on 2010-03-30 19:16:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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