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    dots Submission Name: How Long?dots
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    Author: istalkmurdoch
    Elite Ratio:    7.06 - 129/48/25
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    Description:
       i am so confused



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    dotsHow Long?dots
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    i watch that phone
    growing mad
    with every second that passes
    i sound very sad

    in the back of my mind
    i know he wont call
    but that wont lessen the anticipation
    no, not at all

    we talked the other night
    your voice was so sweet
    along with the words you said
    they swept me off my feet

    i usually never have
    crushes like this
    but i knew it was coming
    something i cannot miss

    please call again
    before i end up calling too
    i can't wait too long
    because i'm falling for you




    Submitted on 2010-03-30 19:18:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      The varied metre here, seems to go really well with the fixed rhyme-scheme. Not boring!

    Waiting for a phone call can be a really emotional experience, and here you express the frustrated thoughts and the anxiety, the tension, so that I felt it too. That must be a good poem.
    | Posted on 2010-04-11 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]
      Lol. This is cute.

    Buster.
    | Posted on 2010-04-01 00:00:00 | by BusterLILblock | [ Reply to This ]


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