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    dots Submission Name: Dawndots
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    Author: hollowshell
    Elite Ratio:    2.85 - 39/40/14
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       Scribbled this down quite quickly, just trying to put a storm of thoughts into words. Lemme know what you think.


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    dotsDawndots
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    The night so dark, the unknow beckons.
    Issues revolve perfectly around my head.
    Staring over and over.

    My feelings; the perfect pawn.

    The screen blurs, a familiar wave.
    My immature hopes; my prospects pave.
    My stupid choices, a fitting grave.

    and then comes the dawn.

    The day so bright, the unknown welcomes.
    Issues dissolve perfectly around my head.
    Longing over and over.

    My feelings; no longer a fawn.

    The screen adjusts, the perfect wave.
    My immature hopes, my prospects gave.
    My wishful choices, my soul, will save.

    Then came Dawn.






    Submitted on 2010-03-30 19:37:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      In the area of connotation, or using fitting words for the night and dawn, it works well- moving from a period of darkness to hopefulness. The underling meaning seems a little more elusive to me but maybe because I was paying more attention to the repeated lines w/ changes?
    | Posted on 2010-04-01 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]


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