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    dots Submission Name: Sleep!dots

    Author: insphered soul
    ASL Info:    19/M/ Hmmm?
    Elite Ratio:    6.49 - 450/382/94
    Words: 57
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 527
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       Trying to sleep and it's not going to happen.

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    Sleep is distant,
    sleep is near,
    sleep is wanted,
    sleep is here


    Sleep is gone,
    sleep is away,
    sleep is far,
    sleep will not play


    Sleep will come,
    sleep will share,
    sleep will comfort,
    sleep is there


    Sleep is,
    sleep can be,
    sleep for everyone,
    sleep for me

    Submitted on 2010-03-31 01:06:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This made me sleepy.
    Great its the middle of the day.

    good write the rhyme is perfect.

    | Posted on 2010-04-02 00:00:00 | by BusterLILblock | [ Reply to This ]
      awww this is a neat before bed poem.

    hope you get some good ol sleep

    | Posted on 2010-04-01 00:00:00 | by DaGrimReaperess | [ Reply to This ]
      Very cute and the rhyme blends nicely.. Makes me want to sleep too.. Lol
    I like the flow of the story as well..
    | Posted on 2010-04-01 00:00:00 | by Maskannai | [ Reply to This ]

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