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    dots Submission Name: Cyber repentancedots
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    Author: Temidayo
    ASL Info:    29 male Nigeria-lagos
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 161/40/20
    Words: 86
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    Bytes: 467



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    dotsCyber repentancedots
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    I am an errant document, I ask u edit my life format my soul.eject and recycle any corrupt thought i file against persons i consider my foes. No longer do I need to photoshop d image people have of me.or download inputs of d devil. Cos they damage like worms eating the motherboard of my soul. Penetrating my stand like trojans. like wifi i seek ur presence. I upload my praise. May I always connect2 ur reception
    Now and for
    All eternity. Enter. Amen




    Submitted on 2010-03-31 05:12:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      the analogy to the computer vs the soul...really good here...

    i have made mistakes, improvised bad documents, some of my life needs to be deleted...some saved...i am not a machine, i am human so forgive me...

    my grammar and spell check don't always work so well, so i make mistakes...and i hit send before i can revise my own life...

    nice piece..yes, very creative.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-03-27 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      I agree with the first commenter, they had a good point.

    I love the usage of nerd language (i prefer that since I cannot text) and how simple it is but how much that it has to say. this would be a good format for more poems, you should consider making other ones like this, just different content.

    After reading a few of your poems I see that your a pretty creative one, please keep writing, and I can't wait to see you next piece of work

    istalkmurdoch
    | Posted on 2010-05-06 00:00:00 | by istalkmurdoch | [ Reply to This ]
      cool.
    reminds me of the lords prayer in txt language... contemporary but still connects the speaker and his god..

    change me
    rearrange me
    make me who you want me to be

    yup.
    i like it.
    | Posted on 2010-05-06 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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