I am an errant document, I ask u edit my life format my soul.eject and recycle any corrupt thought i file against persons i consider my foes. No longer do I need to photoshop d image people have of me.or download inputs of d devil. Cos they damage like worms eating the motherboard of my soul. Penetrating my stand like trojans. like wifi i seek ur presence. I upload my praise. May I always connect2 ur reception
Now and for
All eternity. Enter. Amen
| the analogy to the computer vs the soul...really good here...|
i have made mistakes, improvised bad documents, some of my life needs to be deleted...some saved...i am not a machine, i am human so forgive me...
my grammar and spell check don't always work so well, so i make mistakes...and i hit send before i can revise my own life...
nice piece..yes, very creative.
|| Posted on 2011-03-27 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ] || I agree with the first commenter, they had a good point. |
I love the usage of nerd language (i prefer that since I cannot text) and how simple it is but how much that it has to say. this would be a good format for more poems, you should consider making other ones like this, just different content.
After reading a few of your poems I see that your a pretty creative one, please keep writing, and I can't wait to see you next piece of work
|| Posted on 2010-05-06 00:00:00 | by istalkmurdoch | [ Reply to This ] || cool.|
reminds me of the lords prayer in txt language... contemporary but still connects the speaker and his god..
make me who you want me to be
i like it.
|| Posted on 2010-05-06 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ] |