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    dots Submission Name: scattered dreams dots
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    Author: springwaltz08
    Elite Ratio:    0.53 - 1/2/11
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsscattered dreams dots
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    I'll be all right
    Because I can keep busy

    I'm always hanging on
    Yes, because of the promise you made
    But now, I don't want to cry anymore

    Because we're far apart
    It seems as though everything has changed
    Even the scent of the breeze that passes me by
    And the crowds of people on the subway

    It wasn't a mistake, was it?
    All those times we met...everything was suffocating me
    Even now, I just cannot call up those memories
    The warmth of your lips just won't disappear...

    Because you always push yourself
    You lose sight of what is dear to you
    And now, if there comes a time when you love another
    Just once more, remember that time

    Someday, I want to smile again
    Like the sun on the day when I met you...




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      I love this. Oh my gosh, I really do.

    You've just portrayed all these emotions so beautifully and it's just so heartbreaking, I know absolutely how you feel.

    I hope that since you've written this (if this is based on personal accounts) that things have become better.

    It's just... I love it. It's so sad in the right amounts and now I'm rambling...

    Thanks for sharing (:

    --Esha
    | Posted on 2011-02-03 00:00:00 | by EshyFishy | [ Reply to This ]


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