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    dots Submission Name: Just Not Quite Enough. dots
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    Author: Eyamma
    ASL Info:    16/Sry, I'm taken/Alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.71 - 22/21/77
    Words: 192
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 584
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       1/4/10~2:08 PM
    It's not like it's me. *Trippin' out.*


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    dotsJust Not Quite Enough. dots
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    There are no words...to explain this feeling of uncertainty.
    I won't say,
    I want
    "I won't take this anymore."

    Believe me, I choose to wait.
    And I face it with a smile,
    Though it hurts, I'm not afraid of the Gods of destruction
    knocking down my perfectly constructed world

    Watch, stare, I'm not going to break my gaze, no.
    The oceans tide storming my fortress walls like the white cavalry of a great Armageddon.

    I can't
    I want
    "I can't recognize anything solid."
    Let my fears go, I might find that I'm not lost.

    With everything, what did we learn?
    And so, what was it worth?
    Is there anything we yearn for?
    Everything’s lost now.

    The ocean is dry
    Do I feel hollow?
    Nowhere to hide
    And nothing to swallow

    And not alone and not alone
    And not alone and not alone
    Just let go. We might find our way back home.

    What was...it? What, did I say?
    I want
    "I want this to become something worth its while."

    I feel so absurd in this life, strange.
    Watching the dead live, is strange.




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