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    dots Submission Name: Goodbye to you, goodbye to medots
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    Author: Dark Dann
    ASL Info:    18/ Male/ San Diego
    Elite Ratio:    6.44 - 78/67/53
    Words: 283
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Description:
       When you lose a close friend, you'd do anything to have them back. And maybe you love them in a way, that you're willing to fight to have them stay.

    But even so, you'll have to move on. But remember, the past isn't so dark. The memories, smiles they should bring.


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    dotsGoodbye to you, goodbye to medots
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    Perhaps I can make myself stop feeling this way
    Wanting to be with you every minute of the day.
    Am I so lost with stupid desires
    that I can't say no to the fires
    that burn within my soul
    Until there's nothing left...
    For you to keep.

    I twist and turn
    Fight my way through hordes of darkness
    Lost within my dreams;
    I fight to save you.
    But you're already gone, far out of my reach.
    I pray stay, you say "never more"
    And now...I'm all alone, once more.

    I'm struggling now, the darkness
    It's come to pull me in
    I'm falling down
    Lost in the despair
    you're gone; I'm here, but you're gone.

    I can't help but try to stretch my arm out again
    Desperately trying to hold onto just one piece...
    Just that one part of you that makes me so darn...
    Afraid.
    That part of you that helps keep me sane
    But I was always afraid, always scared
    I never wanted to fall this bad.
    And now it's gone; and I'm scared.
    I've fallen, and I'm only sinking further into madness.
    You're gone; when will you ever be back?

    Goodbye my dearest one
    your face will always be here
    Deep within my heart
    never to be disturbed.
    Should I end like a fool
    holding onto the dreaded past
    What say you?
    You're gone already, never to be back.

    Goodbye to you, and maybe, goodbye to me.
    Cause thinking you'll be back
    It's only a fool's hope
    I don't want to be lost in that dream
    But I won't let you slip out of my heart.
    Goodbye to you, and goodbye to what I was.




    Submitted on 2010-04-01 17:35:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Thank you for speaking out so eloquently in poem for us all that have lost our dearest friends & have had to move on with life & living. You are much appreciated.
    | Posted on 2013-01-17 00:00:00 | by CrypticBard | [ Reply to This ]


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