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    dots Submission Name: A Talk with A Sunsetdots
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    Author: Cure
    ASL Info:    24/M/BakerCity, Or
    Elite Ratio:    4.69 - 26/23/15
    Words: 326
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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       just a thought while walking one day


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    dotsA Talk with A Sunsetdots
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    As I walk down this road on this beautiful spring evening I gaze towards the sky in awe at the beautifully choreographed dance that is: the setting of the sun.

    As I continue to watch the grand finale of this Day unfold I find a question obstructing my appreciation of this moment�where?�
    I cease my stroll down the road and muster up the courage to ask my question.

    �Sunset, where does your beauty come from?�

    As I stand there staring at this magnificent farewell of the day I continue to question: �What do we have in common that gives understanding to this immense appreciation that I have for you?�

    �Oh how I envy your innocence and grace sunset!�

    Continuing my pursuit of untangling this conundrum I begin walking once more, searching for new angles to my illusive question. But every step closer has relentlessly denied me the satisfaction of an answer; and I fear this moment is ending soon!

    And now, as I see my turn ahead I look up to the sunset one last time, preparing myself to thank it for this time we have spent together, when I notice something new.
    This obstruction has given light to a hidden truth.
    There is but one similarity worth recognizing; the fact that we exist, together, here and now and only together at this place in this time is the beauty of the moment. And it is our lack of similarities that emphasis the rarity of this connection.

    There is beauty because there is no appreciation, only admiration of opposing attributes; �for your light has shown the beauty of the moment, and now my mind has made it known��

    I smile to the sunset bidding it farewell then turn left at the corner, ending the moment as I step into the next phase of my walk�




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      I have noticed in the few pieces if yours that I have read that there always seems that scientist in your voice.

    Here it is almost as if your preparing to go through the scientific method, asking your hypothesis:'Sunset, where does your beauty come from?' and 'What do we have in common that gives understanding to this immense appreciation that I have for you? And after some thought, you conclude, in just the same articulate voice, for your light has shown the beauty of the moment, and now my mind has made it known This voice you write in reminds me so much of Einstein, just the essence of him, believing that even the smallest things were proof of God, despit all his numbers and calculations.

    The inner voice this is written in is just lovely, almost as lovely as the the sunset. I like the small subtle descriptors of motion, reminding us that he is on his walk. Its a nice detail. I do wish there was some more description of the actual sunset, although we are told how wonderful, how enlightening this sunset is, there is no official imagery. I wonder if you could find a way to add descriptors in as subtley as you did the motion....making the reader just know what the sunset looked like with out us needing to read paragraphs of "red and yellow sinking below the horizon like a huge grapefruit...." My apologies there for the grapefruit thing.

    I do like the notion, that the connection between nature's beauty and us, is that we are here to act as witness. It is a wonderful statement.

    I enjoyed the piece. Thanks for suggesting it to me.

    Ash



    | Posted on 2010-09-12 00:00:00 | by SincerWritinAsh | [ Reply to This ]
      Kudos.. I honestly love the way you talk to yourself in this piece. Your question is interesting, and its one that I've yet heard. I also enjoy the way you ask and answer your own question. Plus the answer is a good one. I was sort of wondering where you where going with this, but I quickly found out and quite well enjoyed reading this.. Great job.. and keep it up.
    | Posted on 2010-08-29 00:00:00 | by DearlyDeparted | [ Reply to This ]


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