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    dots Submission Name: Cat and Mousedots

    Author: dthforeverpain8
    ASL Info:    17/Female/TMON
    Elite Ratio:    3.26 - 112/217/289
    Words: 177
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 364
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       Again with the formatting - its becoming to be a part of me - its more interesting than just boring stanza.

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    dotsCat and Mousedots

    Playing our little games
    Against the rest of the world
    Until we are finally discovered
    For the carnivorous forgers we are

    Twisting stories
    Carefully unaware
    Of the threat to our lives
    Until we are inevitably caught
    In the traps we ourselves have set

    Grasping air
    Registering only the rush
    Until the impact of the ground
    Opens our eyes to painful reality

    I have come into contact
    With the edge of my precipice
    As a means of extricating myself
    An escape from this evil game at last
    I have sprouted wings to fly away

    Play the trump card
    I have become an Eagle
    Royal and powerful, a leader
    Fear me, and the end to this tournament
    A testament of willpower and brute strength
    Combined, I never implied that the contest was fair

    This is no longer a game
    Of cat and mouse

    And you are no longer
    Ahead of my every move
    I have won this round

    Submitted on 2010-04-02 07:25:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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