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    dots Submission Name: Cat and Mousedots
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    Author: dthforeverpain8
    ASL Info:    17/Female/TMON
    Elite Ratio:    3.26 - 112/217/289
    Words: 177
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 345
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1252



    Description:
       Again with the formatting - its becoming to be a part of me - its more interesting than just boring stanza.



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    dotsCat and Mousedots
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    Chasing
    Sneaking
    Playing our little games
    Against the rest of the world
    Until we are finally discovered
    For the carnivorous forgers we are

    Hiding
    Running
    Twisting stories
    Carefully unaware
    Of the threat to our lives
    Until we are inevitably caught
    In the traps we ourselves have set

    Falling
    Clawing
    Grasping air
    Registering only the rush
    Until the impact of the ground
    Opens our eyes to painful reality

    Aching
    Bleeding
    I have come into contact
    With the edge of my precipice
    As a means of extricating myself
    An escape from this evil game at last
    I have sprouted wings to fly away


    Changing
    Morphing
    Play the trump card
    I have become an Eagle
    Royal and powerful, a leader
    Fear me, and the end to this tournament
    A testament of willpower and brute strength
    Combined, I never implied that the contest was fair


    This is no longer a game
    Of cat and mouse

    And you are no longer
    Ahead of my every move
    I have won this round




    Submitted on 2010-04-02 07:25:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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