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    dots Submission Name: Me And My One True Lovedots
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    Author: Frank Maguire
    ASL Info:    57 / UK
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 1846/1390/288
    Words: 116
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsMe And My One True Lovedots
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    In a stream where clear the waters flow
    Me and my love, we once did go
    We bathed and held each other so
    Me and my one true love

    In a field where flowers touch the sky
    Me and my love, we once did lie
    We watched the clouds go rolling by
    Me and my one true love

    In a place where lovers never rue
    Me and my love, our passion grew
    We kissed and found desires new
    Me and my one true love

    In a moment where two hearts are one
    Me and my love, our web was spun
    We lay entwined beneath the sun
    Me and my one true love




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    ||| Comments |||
      This wonderful poem would make an excellent love song!
    You could give Paul McCartney a run for his money in the ballad department...
    seriously.
    Thanks for sharing yet another fantastic ode to the wonders of love!
    | Posted on 2010-04-10 00:00:00 | by latentlylyrical | [ Reply to This ]
      Great imagery. You're lucky to have felt that. Keep it up!
    | Posted on 2010-04-07 00:00:00 | by YC013 | [ Reply to This ]
      Aaah, this is lovely! Nothing enriches the senses and the emotions so much as a really good love poem, and this is a great one!

    It conveys the sense of true love and innocent passion to the reader; something which we all long for and aspire to, but few of us really find.

    Outstanding work Frank!
    | Posted on 2010-04-04 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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