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    dots Submission Name: pastel violencedots

    Author: leocrates
    Elite Ratio:    4.95 - 103/34/38
    Words: 127
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotspastel violencedots

    bunny bunny sex bunny bunny bunny
    money money chocolate jelly beans and me
    and jesus is having a day of the dead...
    and the waft of trite and tripe emoticons over life and death and appeasement of the beast forgiveness...
    religion a mad science
    and children are the Frankenstein
    its the church that is igor...

    lop eared bunny...

    pink is for chokers...
    sea foam is for froth...
    orange is for the o range...
    violet for the evening sky over peaceful towns that don't have retards...

    geeking on fuzzy bunnys,,,
    and i love it and pet it and feed it carrots...
    'thats good george'

    old yellar ...

    mothera the yard of sleep dust...

    hard boiled...

    Submitted on 2010-04-04 12:57:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Okay, All over the place...
    I see the thread connecting all the peices, however, eh. Lines stand out as really good, and other's fall short of the mark. You set up high standards for yourself with some excellent lines, "and jesus is having a day of the dead...", "appeasement of the beast forgiveness..."
    and then come the lines that are mediocore, "and children are the Frankenstein
    its the church that is igor...", "orange is for the o range..."
    Not to mention your fondness for the dot. dot. dot.

    Not trying to be mean.
    | Posted on 2010-04-09 00:00:00 | by Carosuel | [ Reply to This ]

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