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    Author: Hazel eyes Jess
    ASL Info:    23/female/new york
    Elite Ratio:    3.14 - 70/74/29
    Words: 79
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 580
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    Let him love you like you dreamed he would,
    Make him love you like you wished he could.
    Let him hold you, let him stare
    Let him know how much you care
    Let him kiss you,never lie
    Don't ever let him say goodbye
    Show eachother how to live
    Give him all you have to give
    Let him need you more each day
    Assured that everythings okay
    Open up your heart and mind
    Surely it's true love you'll find <3




    Submitted on 2010-04-04 21:46:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I agree totally with Lynn7. Such a lovely, pure write. I love how it seems to give so much, in so little words. Keep it up.
    | Posted on 2010-04-05 00:00:00 | by hollowshell | [ Reply to This ]
      One of the most beautiful poems I've read in a while.
    Very profound, but yet so simple.
    Love and Peace,
    | Posted on 2010-04-04 00:00:00 | by lynn7 | [ Reply to This ]


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