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    dots Submission Name: Fortitudedots
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    Author: istalkmurdoch
    Elite Ratio:    7.06 - 129/48/25
    Words: 43
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       not really a good work, but it's word that I have come to like and respect, if you can really respect a word (can you?)

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    dotsFortitudedots
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    through my pain
    I will learn
    that through pain
    I will earn
    fortitude

    I used to not know
    what that really meant
    but the time I took too know
    was time well spent
    to learn about fortitude





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      It's tightly structured, which I love to read again and again. 'Fortitude' is the last word of each stanza. 'Pain' and 'know', two words that link up to show your theme, are emphasised as identical rhymes, which also lets you use the word twice in different ways. Learn/earn and meant/spent are beautifully linked in their meanings. The freely composed metre gives speech-rhythms that are just appropriate to what is being said.

    You didn't say much: just a proverb that most people come up with sometimes. But actually this is the most important type of poem, putting an ordinary thought in memorable words.
    | Posted on 2010-04-11 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]
      well this makes one want to go look up the word fortitude! for there's meaning exceeding definition. typo error too instead of to
    | Posted on 2010-04-05 00:00:00 | by Temidayo | [ Reply to This ]


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