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    dots Submission Name: To my Capuletdots
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    Author: Swimming Bird
    ASL Info:    31/m/AR
    Elite Ratio:    5.36 - 92/90/27
    Words: 177
    Class/Type: Poetry/Romance
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    dotsTo my Capuletdots
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    To the girl who makes me sigh,
    And wonder what it's like to cry,
    And makes my heart fly oh so high,
    I can't forget (oh I have tried)
    That sweet smile you supplied.
    Such rare beauty (that's no lie)
    That none for you their love can hide.
    That no man can dare deride.
    But try instead to stay nearby,
    That they can try their love to ply. 
    Be it weak, or bold, or shy,
    They may your love attempt to buy,
    But they not know you quite like I,
    Thee is Juliet inside.
    You care not of wealth and pride,
    But the sweeter, softer side.
    The part of man which none can chide.
    Oh, that I might now confide,
    I wish 'twas me who had your eye.
    Then I could gravity defy,
    And join you flying in the sky,
    And we could be forever nigh,
    Side by side in life's long ride.         




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    ||| Comments |||
      And she played Juliet to your Romeo. Go, Romeo, & make all of her all of yours.
    | Posted on 2013-01-17 00:00:00 | by CrypticBard | [ Reply to This ]
      Aww I love it, it's super sweet but tragic, saying how much you see in this girl and her with someone else. You have this gift to see the best in people, treasure it philip, not everyone is so blessed. You can light up whole worlds with the care you hold on to, miss you buddy.

    And great piece :)

    <3 flora
    | Posted on 2010-04-26 00:00:00 | by blankscreen | [ Reply to This ]


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