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    dots Submission Name: Love in Paindots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 187
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsLove in Paindots
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    I am here
    But I want to go
    To fall inside a rainbow

    Leave this face
    And this mask of woe
    Forget myself to forget the world

    Never to return to the sorrow
    The tears of violence
    We all know

    Anguish to hurt and anger still
    And in its traps of happenstance
    We remain
    All we see and all we know
    Is our love
    And our love in pain

    I am here
    But I want to go
    Fall within the rainbow

    Touch the selves we were meant to know

    I am here
    But incomplete
    Living with survival, living with defeat

    So many lies to see through
    So much of history we have been blinded to
    How can anyone ever know you

    These puppetries play with my soul
    The deceit of centuries
    The deception of us all

    Agony to torment and bitterness still
    And in their traps we take their poisoned pill
    Enslaved to a lie we remain
    All we see and all we know
    Is our love
    And our love in pain




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