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    dots Submission Name: Done With Youdots
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    Author: daughterofdeath
    ASL Info:    23/Female/West Virginia
    Elite Ratio:    4.68 - 277/293/232
    Words: 331
    Class/Type: Poetry/Fuck it all
    Total Views: 503
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    Description:
       Kind of started, then ranted. I think this is good start, probably going to revise it a lot though. Well, I think it has enough emotion in it, what do you think?

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    dotsDone With Youdots
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    I could be criticized
    for how I handled things.
    They can say I'm wrong,
    that I moved too fast.
    But I'm truly happy.
    Call me selfish,
    but that's my main concern.
    Call me childish
    but the world still
    revolves around me
    and my happiness.
    I am the most important
    and I will put myself first.
    So don't point your hatred
    and your hurt
    toward me.
    The first cut may be deepest,
    but the second went in
    just as deep.
    I may have cut you badly,
    but you made the first cut.
    You hurt me first.
    So the sob story
    of how much I hurt you
    does not bother me.
    Rewind to the time
    when I didn't want to move.
    When I wanted to just lay down
    and hope the pain went away.
    Wished I never met you,
    or that you never met her.
    But my wishes never came true.
    Until now I couldn't be happy.
    What I did was nothing
    compared to the hurt you gave me.
    I just followed where my heart
    was trying to lead me.
    It was just leading me
    away from where you were going.
    And no one pulled me away.
    I was not yours anymore.
    You gave that up
    when you told me goodbye.
    But after what you've done,
    after everything with her,
    I was suppose to wait on you?
    Wait until you were ready
    to have a committed relationship?
    With just one woman,
    not two or three.
    The problem was
    I was done with waiting.
    I was done with trying to piece together
    something that you were fighting.
    I chose my happiness,
    I chose to feel free again,
    something I haven't felt in a while.
    What you chose now
    has nothing to do with me.
    So point your hurt and pain
    towards someone you haven't hurt.
    Point it toward someone
    who gives a damn
    and will give you the sympathy
    that you're looking for.
    Because I'm done with it,
    and I'm done with you.




    Submitted on 2010-04-06 07:25:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Bravo, well done. This had everything your heart was screaming. This would be one of those poems that you donít want to change being that it has everything you needed to say. And your thoughts on the manner, I whole heartedly agree its better to be free then to live in misery. Someone like that doesnít deserve to feel anything but pain when all he leaves behind is pain. And sometimes when you want to be happy you do have to pick up and go and do your own thing cause in reality it is all about you. Again the poem was good I could find anything that I would really want to change if needed. Word that wore spoken was full of emotion and filled with truth and that is what makes an awesome poem. So keep up the good work and keep holding your head high.


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