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A Good Night's Sleep


Author: Ontlogicalamity
ASL Info:    33/M/NY
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Class/Type: Prose /Longing
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This is indeed about last night. I blatantly stole a phrase from Harvey Danger, but I love the phrase and found it to fit most appropriately. But the point I'm making at the end is a very important aspect of my personal philosophy, and I'm surprised at myself for being so candid with both it and my feelings for the one I'm talking about. Therefore I hope you all can take something from it. All comments/thoughts welcome.


A Good Night's Sleep



Last night I had a very good sleep. It was the first really good sleep I've had in months. I fell asleep with my lover in my arms, or at least in my mind. Her embrace was warm and soft, as it was when we hugged at our last meeting. She was right there with me, and I could feel her soft curly hair on my face. I've only ever felt it once before, but fingertips have memories. She turned to face me and smiled. Her smile ignited a sun in my heart the first time she blessed me with it. I wanted to kiss her. She wanted to kiss me. But we did not kiss last night, for there is a very fine line between memory and fantasy, which I dare not cross. It is good to accept a gift, but it is wrong to presume more will follow.




Submitted on 2004-07-24 14:17:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  ok so in the lord knows how many years Ive known you, I must say this is the most honest, eloquent, heartfelt, elaboration of your feelings I have ever experienced...Mark this Aaron cause you wont believe me, but its the kind of piece after having read I can say I only wish I had wrote the piece myself. see you managed to do something I feel Im horrible at writing about the one you love and not having it be sappy or cliché or seemingly forced into some structure that doesnt give your hearts voice a chance to speak. Very well done after reading it 4 times I cant think of a darn thing to say otherwise.
| Posted on 2004-07-26 00:00:00 | by Mithrandir | [ Reply to This ]
  I thought this was excellent. I like how this wasn't all about sex. You didn't even kiss her! This was so refreshing in this world of x-rated song lyrics and explicit tv.
| Posted on 2004-07-24 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]
  it is amazing how we can bring forth a person's image so definitively when they are not there. "fingertips have memories" is a great line, and so true. i like your last lines about not presuming more will follow. you are truly a gentleman, i believe!
| Posted on 2004-07-24 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]


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