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    Author: Dark Dann
    ASL Info:    18/ Male/ San Diego
    Elite Ratio:    6.44 - 78/67/53
    Words: 440
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Another moment passes by
    And I seem to be stuck
    Lost in the word "hold"
    Hold on, stay still, don't go.

    But words mean nothing, don't they?
    Actions speak louder than words
    But I can only do enough to show you
    Show you how this heart burns for you
    Caught within a fiery passion of fire and stone

    Lightning struck down on us
    Shards of ice fell down from the sky
    The waters became restless
    until your fire became dry.
    But was it even there in the beginning?
    Or was it just shadow of my dancing flames?
    I swore the fire was black
    But now I'm not sure.

    I find myself holding onto you
    Holding onto the dream of the fire
    But I can't seem to bring it back to life
    I scream stay, reborn, burn again
    But the words end in deaf ears.

    They say once the fire crumbles it never comes back
    But I want the heat you gave off, it was so nice
    I want the company of your flames dancing with mine
    Following the beat of the music
    the embers glowing so fiercely in the night sky
    We outshone the stars every time.

    But now another moment passes by
    the illusion is erased by the endless rain in my heart
    And I realize my fire is almost gone
    Cause you're so unkind
    even though i say I'll always be here
    For the rest of my life;
    I'm the one you'll never want, the one you left behind

    And now I'm all by myself
    Stuck with your sick twisted smile in my head
    Your cold brown eyes staring down
    at my beautiful disgrace
    and maybe I was never meant to be here
    With my dead jaded eyes
    And I'll close them one more time
    As my lips murmur the one word you always hated
    Such beautiful words so heavily detested.

    I l....

    I can no longer last this way
    I'm no longer the same cause of this
    Shattered, broken, and destroyed
    Lonely as my flame witters away
    It gives one final struggle
    as it tries to revive your fires
    But my fire quickly crumbles
    leaving nothing but the ashes
    My mask never meant anything
    I couldn't hide it anymore.
    The pain is all I have now.

    But please, if you still love me
    Give me a sign; one sign to show me
    That we'd last forever, in some way
    That we were never apart
    that I was the blind fool that drove you away

    Remember my promise?
    Forever, and ever. Until the stars fade.
    I love you




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      And the promise is continually being kept and refreshed. Beautiful devotion. Hope love finds its just return.
    | Posted on 2013-01-17 00:00:00 | by CrypticBard | [ Reply to This ]


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