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    dots Submission Name: Needs No Namedots

    Author: colbybradshaw
    ASL Info:    24,deep south, u.s
    Elite Ratio:    3.61 - 19/19/29
    Words: 156
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 485
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       I wrote this for somebody.

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    dotsNeeds No Namedots

    Pulmonary confusion,
    when i see the color green,
    the dust blows in my eyes,
    the sun a vibrating sieve of gas,
    melancholia has become impractical,
    the smell of her skin,
    drifts to me,
    from the oblivious silence of the air around me,
    my hands get slick,
    my eyes wander,
    I wonder,
    when will i be home again,
    the heart bleeds for this,
    the endorphins slide into place,
    opioid receptors cackle in delight,
    but this is no capsule,
    this is no excuse,
    this is no pretense,
    this is veritas,
    the culmination of thought,
    the embodiment of the virginal,
    the true religion,
    the one we have been told to follow but never can,
    this is absolution,
    and its lips our sweet to the taste,
    the senses are numbed,
    the fiction dies in the distance,
    everything that was dead,
    grows in me,
    chains fall off the bones,
    as you blossom like an orchid,
    and i am overwhelmed.

    Submitted on 2010-04-06 20:24:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow. Quite beautiful.
    I'm sure if you gave this to that "someone" they'd love it.
    | Posted on 2010-04-08 00:00:00 | by xxiknownowxx | [ Reply to This ]

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