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    dots Submission Name: god or Goddots
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    Author: wovenwords
    ASL Info:    19/F/Washington
    Elite Ratio:    2.46 - 108/303/189
    Words: 251
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsgod or Goddots
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    Today
    I did something very strange.
    In a fit of sheer, grasping desperation
    I lifted my hands up,
    pressed my dry palms together towards the
    ceiling
    fraught with tiny holes from pushpins
    and amongst the noise of the building,
    the elated shrieks and mottled
    noise of various conversations
    I began to whisper in hushed tones
    to a god or God
    who may-or-may-not exist.
    I may-or-may-not have said ďfuckĒ
    but I didnít apologize to him or Him.
    I said dear god itís been a while but
    right now I really need something
    and I canít help myself anymore.
    And sometimes I canít catch my breath,
    it only gets to the precipice of my throat
    but doesnít fall off the cliff into my lungs,
    and sometimes when it gets really quiet
    in the room thereís this high-pitched ringing
    and it makes my ears and brain feel
    a little bit lonely.
    Also sometimes,
    I donít know if itís just me,
    but when Iím watching people walk along
    and like, animals and such,
    scurrying,
    Iím struck by this overwhelming
    monotony of life;
    we may have friends but why
    we may love each other
    and hate each other
    and hold hands with each other
    and go out
    but why.
    And I thought
    if youíre or Youíre up there
    why donít we
    float in the air
    and feast on clouds
    and why do we have worries
    and why do the planets orbit
    the sun in ellipses and not perfect circles?




    Submitted on 2010-04-07 18:03:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      For when you truly see God as he truly is, it's such a beautiful relationship, a life becomes a burden that you can bear and are willing to bear.
    | Posted on 2010-04-08 00:00:00 | by xxiknownowxx | [ Reply to This ]
      But at the same time It's exilerating.
    | Posted on 2010-04-08 00:00:00 | by xxiknownowxx | [ Reply to This ]
      Because of our choice to leave God.
    It's quite depressing.
    | Posted on 2010-04-08 00:00:00 | by xxiknownowxx | [ Reply to This ]


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