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    dots Submission Name: Dreamingdots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 199
    Class/Type: Prose/Comedy
    Total Views: 547
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    dotsDreamingdots
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    he was pigeon toed
    and had a wonky eye
    that tilted his expression
    when he smiled
    and he smelled like, marijuana (for lack of a better word)
    and sold me bootlegged dvd's
    mother fucker sold me boot legged dvd's

    I had a dream about him
    that I met him in my high school parking lot
    he was surrounded by police
    and a German Shepard who thought he was the police

    the dog barked my name
    spoke very clearly to relieve me of my fear
    said, this day isn't meant for you

    you won't wake up
    you won't pass go
    all in all you're just dead

    and this is over
    this dream and the girl that I was last night
    foreign
    bereaved
    shy and hiding in the kitchen of my high school lunchroom
    not understanding what I was doing there or in the science lab
    not even lying on the table
    not even understanding that this turn was made in a truck that had blown up

    It takes a while to get to me
    I take is all so seriously
    that when I wake up none of it leaves

    I am still




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