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    dots Submission Name: Your Son Missing Youdots
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    Author: faideddarkness
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Idaho
    Elite Ratio:    6.53 - 101/55/51
    Words: 228
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Longing
    Total Views: 981
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1447



    Description:
       My Family moved about over two thousand miles away and one of the things my dad and i would do is we'd go on backing trips and hike mountains.


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    dotsYour Son Missing Youdots
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    I stair across the horizon
    After climbing this mountain
    Leaving behind an agony
    Still learning to live in lonely
    Branches braking from the heat
    As twigs crackling under my feet
    But through the darkest woods
    Iím still moving on

    Sometimes in my mind
    I see you in front of me
    Leading upon this old trail
    Of what it meant to be free
    I feel these trials coming down
    Remembering how you made if through
    And without you beating down this road
    Iíd never know what to do

    When I stand on the highest peak
    Looking down
    It never feels the same
    And when the wind starts to blow
    All around
    I swear I hear your name
    Tears drops from the sky
    Momentís that never die
    Your world missing you
    Your son missing you

    Now here on this fire lit night
    Where the dark is swallows the light
    And I know thisíll never take your place
    I sang this song just to see your face
    Soon Iíll be heading back home
    Another world that lives alone
    Knowing you had once been here
    My memories will never disappear


    (I know itíll never take your place
    When I sang this song just to see your face
    But it never feels the same
    Even when I still hear your name
    Your son missing you)




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      i miss you charchar :( and so does everyone else. we will always love you. and you will never be alone. we are still here
    | Posted on 2010-07-26 00:00:00 | by grimmreaper | [ Reply to This ]


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