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Every New Year


Author: wolfgurl830
ASL Info:    18/F/OH
Elite Ratio:    0.96 - 42 /38 /34
Words: 72
Class/Type: Poetry /Friendship
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Every New Year



With every new year
We get a new friend
With New stories to send
Some things come together
While others fall apart
Always having a friend for now and forever
Some things need repair
Don’t want a relationship like a broken chair
I miss having you near
A good friend to talk to
Just wanted to say I'm thinking of you
Hope to talk to you before the next full moon




Submitted on 2010-04-08 14:52:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  It has some potential, but it doesn't do much for me.

How about something more like this:

With every new year
We get a new friend
Some things come together
With New stories to send

We remain
While others fall apart
Friends Forever
To the end from the Start

But here you know
Some things need repair
this tormented relation
split by splitting hairs

I miss having you near
A good friend come soon
I'm thinking of you
Beneath this night's full moon
| Posted on 2010-04-08 00:00:00 | by Mimicked | [ Reply to This ]


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