Every New Year

Author: wolfgurl830 ASL Info:    18/F/OH Elite Ratio:    0.96 - 42 /38 /34 Words: 72

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Every New Year

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With every new year We get a new friend With New stories to send Some things come together While others fall apart Always having a friend for now and forever Some things need repair Don’t want a relationship like a broken chair I miss having you near A good friend to talk to Just wanted to say I'm thinking of you Hope to talk to you before the next full moon

Submitted on 2010-04-08 14:52:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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It has some potential, but it doesn't do much for me. How about something more like this: With every new year We get a new friend Some things come together With New stories to send We remain While others fall apart Friends Forever To the end from the Start But here you know Some things need repair this tormented relation split by splitting hairs I miss having you near A good friend come soon I'm thinking of you Beneath this night's full moon

| Posted on 2010-04-08 00:00:00 | by Mimicked | [ Reply to This ]

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