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    dots Submission Name: On the backs our eyelids...dots

    Author: Mimicked
    ASL Info:    28, Male, Portland
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 10/0/15
    Words: 221
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       Oh it's just another poem about life, and the dreams that fill the silent voids.

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    dotsOn the backs our eyelids...dots

    with time an after thought
    their still-shot series is shown
    muted critics sit amongst fans
    and w/ rapidity, view the stills in this still-shot slide show

    it's the past, present AND future
    Every high voiced through lows
    its decored in an omnipresent technicolor with perfect clarity
    all seen with eyes closed

    every second composed through a million moments
    every snapshot suspended in it's own context
    we're alive like you were then, screaming "look, No hands!"
    with lessons still learned, we're younger again, but we make demands

    now with foresight afforded, is our path not the same....?
    Can we decipher which components made us stronger, weaker?
    does it even matter?
    We matter. Yes. and we dont "accept" the inevitable
    We are the inevitable and we've already found comfort in ourselves

    So now light creeps through the cracks
    between eyelashes it replaces the impression
    calmness remains and we remain standing with our luggage in hand

    every choice we've made is there stacked neatly along the curbs
    Picket fences and weedless flower-beds fill out the shadow box neighborhood
    every decision yet-to-be loiters up ahead

    between the curbs and manicured yards we are
    and not intimidated either
    We stand and lean in, and smile between hiccuping laughter
    The first noble truth was already accepted
    and it's accuracy is comical...

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