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    dots Submission Name: Thoughts become Thingsdots
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    Author: Mimicked
    ASL Info:    28, Male, Portland
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 10/0/15
    Words: 170
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 357
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1096



    Description:
       Here's a poem I wrote about a girl I like. It's pretty self explanatory, AND, if you comment on it that'd be pretty darn cool...


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    dotsThoughts become Thingsdots
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    I often take you with me in my day dreams
    With a slight shift in resonance we're a world away
    Living off pristine vistas and the new
    Sharing warm cups of laughter in a quaint cafe

    Passport stamps are played out
    Visas fatigued
    And it just so happens we've topped the Seven Summits in under seven minutes
    And sailed the 7 seas all Seven days of the week

    Yes, just a dream, my inner critic chimes
    But my reality transcends manifestation a la grapes to wine

    So I dream a dreamer's dream
    I hang my coat on ideals
    My thoughts on your smile
    in this fantasy with wheels
    It's errant and without aim
    a swift rush between a pause
    But yet just a dream....well...just because....

    Sometimes I wonder what you think
    Where you place your yesterday
    Do you blink in the moment; in your dream of today?

    Oh my, my musing mind
    always losing it's place
    But you the constant in my dream to escape....




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