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    dots Submission Name: Ashleydots
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    Author: Mimicked
    ASL Info:    28, Male, Portland
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 10/0/15
    Words: 171
    Class/Type: Poetry/Romance
    Total Views: 391
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1267



    Description:
       I wrote this last summer for a girl I was pseudo-dating at the time. She's studying runway fashion / design / marketing in Art school, and after telling her I liked writing poems, I wrote this for her one afternoon to show that I was capable.

    Let me know what you think!! (please?)


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    dotsAshleydots
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    Ashley, Ashley
    Just who might you be?
    A cute girl - yeah
    A Fine lady - for me...

    Fashionably Savvy
    With a Penchant for Design
    Out on the town
    She's dressed to the nines...

    She's Sassy & Swank
    Devising all Ways
    Chic & Complete
    Like a fine Cabernet...

    Up in her heels
    Full of Ambition
    The runway's an instrument
    She's the musician
    Composing each Verse
    Note and every lyric
    Of this sweet little ballad
    She wrote with her spirit

    The song is a hit
    A Smashing Success
    The crowd Raves with applause
    As she gives them her best...

    Oh..what a show!
    Her Designs were Fantastic
    Clean and Contemporary
    But timeless and nostalgic

    Now it's been just a few weeks
    Since I first saw her face
    We chatted it up
    Like there's no time to waste

    So far so good
    A budding admiration
    Charging ahead
    Seeking your approbation

    I've worked for your laughs, smiles and glances...
    Hoping that maybe you'll tolerate my antics....




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