Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Ashleydots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: Mimicked
    ASL Info:    28, Male, Portland
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 10/0/15
    Words: 171
    Class/Type: Poetry/Romance
    Total Views: 383
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1267



    Description:
       I wrote this last summer for a girl I was pseudo-dating at the time. She's studying runway fashion / design / marketing in Art school, and after telling her I liked writing poems, I wrote this for her one afternoon to show that I was capable.

    Let me know what you think!! (please?)


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsAshleydots
    -------------------------------------------


    Ashley, Ashley
    Just who might you be?
    A cute girl - yeah
    A Fine lady - for me...

    Fashionably Savvy
    With a Penchant for Design
    Out on the town
    She's dressed to the nines...

    She's Sassy & Swank
    Devising all Ways
    Chic & Complete
    Like a fine Cabernet...

    Up in her heels
    Full of Ambition
    The runway's an instrument
    She's the musician
    Composing each Verse
    Note and every lyric
    Of this sweet little ballad
    She wrote with her spirit

    The song is a hit
    A Smashing Success
    The crowd Raves with applause
    As she gives them her best...

    Oh..what a show!
    Her Designs were Fantastic
    Clean and Contemporary
    But timeless and nostalgic

    Now it's been just a few weeks
    Since I first saw her face
    We chatted it up
    Like there's no time to waste

    So far so good
    A budding admiration
    Charging ahead
    Seeking your approbation

    I've worked for your laughs, smiles and glances...
    Hoping that maybe you'll tolerate my antics....




    Submitted on 2010-04-09 13:57:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    184338

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    The Promise written by annie0888
    Munyonyo written by expiring_touch
    Hopelessly Blind written by ForgottenGraves
    Linger written by saartha
    Push written by JanePlane
    To the King written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Pressure written by hybridsongwrite
    In the Mouth of Elysium written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Sunset written by rev.jpfadeproof
    Devils in the Details written by endlessgame23
    Treasure Chest written by PieceOfCake
    Our Cinder Crisis written by SavedDragon
    One Thing written by Wolfwatching
    Bond written by saartha
    4th of July written by layDsayD
    Whiteout written by layDsayD
    I will call out your name written by RisingSon
    It's Night Now written by RisingSon
    To Glow written by krs3332003
    Love Can Be... written by HAVENSMITH92
    Skin of Fables written by ShadowParadox
    Fathoms of the Lullaby Sea written by HisNameIsNoMore
    This written by Chelebel
    In My Head written by faideddarkness
    A Sonnet for Nina written by SavedDragon
    Once Again written by krs3332003
    Hollow Points written by RequiemOfDreams
    new moon written by CrypticBard
    Deaf Dumb and Blind is no excuse written by poetotoe
    What happens written by Wolfwatching

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry