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    dots Submission Name: Herodots

    Author: twistedchick
    ASL Info:    18/girlie/utah
    Elite Ratio:    1.57 - 14/58/73
    Words: 199
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Longing
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    A tear slides down her porcelain face as she whispers her cry of need for him, but it falls on deft ears.
    She's left alone in the dark crying out for one who won't come...
    the darkness will wrap around her choking her in her nightmares...
    scream and cry she will...
    wake up she won't...
    be rescued she won't...
    her hero left her as the sun went down past the high mountains.
    He can not hear her pleas with the shadows of the night, the ones who haunt her night after night.
    Haunted she is...
    weeping she is...
    lost and alone she is...
    will her hero come back, walking in the dew of the morning?
    Wait through the pain she must to find the answer to her question.
    Oh how she loves her hero, who takes all her sadness away...
    come back to me she prays...
    hold me as the sun rises and the flowers wake, and the birds sing there joyful tunes. This is what she'll wait for, dieing in her memories all night long just to be with him in the morning. It is worth it...it is all so worth it

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