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    dots Submission Name: As the Sun Setsdots
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    Author: Realitywarp87
    ASL Info:    25/M/FL
    Elite Ratio:    3.1 - 27/53/63
    Words: 62
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsAs the Sun Setsdots
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    As the sun begins to set
    The rays sparkle off your skin
    Illuminating my life
    And bringing warmth from within
    The light trickles through your body
    Catching my eyes
    You shimmer ever brightly
    Like a crystle in the sky
    The beams are slowly fading
    As the sun has it's last say
    But before the coming darkness
    Your light takes my breath away




    Submitted on 2010-04-10 12:37:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I think this was beautifully written. Its short and simple, but clearly says what you meant to say in it. I can't think of anything that needs to be worked on in this.

    Nice write
    ~*~katara~*~
    | Posted on 2010-04-12 00:00:00 | by daughterofdeath | [ Reply to This ]


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