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As the Sun Sets


Author: Realitywarp87
ASL Info:    25/M/FL
Elite Ratio:    3.1 - 27 /53 /63
Words: 62
Class/Type: Poetry /Passion
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As the Sun Sets



As the sun begins to set
The rays sparkle off your skin
Illuminating my life
And bringing warmth from within
The light trickles through your body
Catching my eyes
You shimmer ever brightly
Like a crystle in the sky
The beams are slowly fading
As the sun has it's last say
But before the coming darkness
Your light takes my breath away




Submitted on 2010-04-10 12:37:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I think this was beautifully written. Its short and simple, but clearly says what you meant to say in it. I can't think of anything that needs to be worked on in this.

Nice write
~*~katara~*~
| Posted on 2010-04-12 00:00:00 | by daughterofdeath | [ Reply to This ]


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