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    dots Submission Name: The Last Summer Raindots
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    Author: Celeste J. Bell
    ASL Info:    27 Indiana
    Elite Ratio:    3.84 - 261/310/148
    Words: 92
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsThe Last Summer Raindots
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    Far away
    so far away
    and deceiving
    and pleading
    mind reading away
    Butterscotch romance
    expiration dates passed us by
    in the summer heat we wept for relief
    but our eyes stayed bone dry
    Elated congratulations
    too belated to count sincere
    but we smiled along anyhow
    and prayed for a path out of here
    Through thunder and lightning
    we drove over the law
    keeping secrets and silence
    within our cheerfully grim craw
    We rhymed without reason
    we loved without care
    and when our hope expired
    we realized we never reached our there.




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