The Last Summer Rain

Author: Celeste J. Bell ASL Info:    27 Indiana Elite Ratio:    3.84 - 261 /310 /148 Words: 92

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The Last Summer Rain

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Far away so far away and deceiving and pleading mind reading away Butterscotch romance expiration dates passed us by in the summer heat we wept for relief but our eyes stayed bone dry Elated congratulations too belated to count sincere but we smiled along anyhow and prayed for a path out of here Through thunder and lightning we drove over the law keeping secrets and silence within our cheerfully grim craw We rhymed without reason we loved without care and when our hope expired we realized we never reached our there.

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