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Could you please check this essay for me? I'm so confused of my grammar and writing skills:)


Things doing in the beach

There is no doubt that almost people come to the beach to relax when they have free time or in holidays. Therefore, I usually go to some famous beaches in my countries in fall for some interesting activities inside as well as outside the beach with my family’s member to take a rest after tiring semesters.
Firstly, the things we do outside the beach is as attracting as the things we can do inside the beach. First step is that we have been fond of sun rise in the morning at the beach before we rent a helicopter to observe the beach from the highest height that we can get. Nobody can deny that the sight of the beach from the helicopter is more interesting than on the ground. The next step is that we listen to the sound from the ocean waves or from the shell we get while walking along the beach after having sunbath as well as building the castle. In the evening, we tent outside the beach and sit together for campfire if we have time for camping.
Finally, activities inside the beach is also impressive if we really want to play because about fifty percent Vietnamese go to the beach to swim only without playing any else games though they know them. For example, bungee jump and surfing make our heart jump faster besides the feeling that we are adventurers especially with the surfing game; the sense come to our brain that we can also control the beach since it is below our foot. Diving is one of the most favorite activities in my opinion because that thing makes me sometimes feel like a shark and make my knowledge broadened with the strange world of the ocean compare to the real world. Comeback to the surface of the beach, we rent a boat for fishing but we always get nothing, however, we know how to use a boat as well as feel comfortable when we are in the middle of the beach with only the blue color from the water and the sky.
To conclusion, no matter how your life is boring and complex, the suggestion is that going to the beach. The reason is that before go back home, you have brought the relaxation and yourselves to solve any difficult problems in your lives. This means that coming to the beach and finding optimist person in your mind through amusing and funny activities.

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