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    Author: PoeticNonsense
    ASL Info:    20/f/around
    Elite Ratio:    3.82 - 205/215/100
    Words: 178
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    shaken, not disturbed: that's how i take my tonic now.
    iíve got the setup of a true neurotic
    (just ask Sylvia)
    but these dead girl hands won't shake
    anymore. the floor drops out from under me.
    i swallow my deja vu and
    I know that this is what i chose.
    this lovely, terrible, glorious demise
    is of my own design: a funeral for those who are still alive.
    They've left us in the liars' den.

    desperately kissing the bittersweet
    ashes that fall from the sky,
    snowflakes damned to hell.
    i must agree with the dead-red snow: there is
    no way out this time.
    i stare at the stars and tarot cards and
    they tell me the
    same damn thing. they twist themselves into
    cautionary tales as the clouds
    argue amongst themselves.
    itís not the same, not the same, the mocking birds call.
    but Theyíre wrong. itís all the same.




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