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    dots Submission Name: pieceful peacesdots
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    Author: PoeticNonsense
    ASL Info:    20/f/around
    Elite Ratio:    3.82 - 205/215/100
    Words: 263
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotspieceful peacesdots
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    To those who should
    have known better
    than to burn Their hands
    on the stars:

    i fell head over heels for Your
    heart this heartbeat Halleluiah is nothing
    but the truth
    "i have a pill for you to take"
    but i promise i'm not crazy i'm not crazy

    a passive-aggressive victory feast
    eating crow because someone
    killed my little rag doll

    crayon-drawn
    lines and hoops to leap
    (leap of faith)
    through
    we canít pick our pieces

    bobbing and weaving threads
    some strands nearly worn through
    and i can see the
    magic poking out
    some are not so loved but i
    can't remove one thread
    without unraveling the whole
    bittersweet mess
    i wove it myself all by myself
    (don't want to be all by myself)
    i stapled my poor lips shut
    they can't betray me anymore loose lips
    see shrinks

    iím standing in the cold again
    (Your smile's on fire)
    my black and blue heart bleeds i bleed
    i cradle my poor dead rag doll soul
    and watch as
    ink and blood
    write out my mystery on the cold
    hospital floor

    this whole bloody mess is all my own
    my own fault
    the sun sets on the wrong side of
    my eyes but the darkness is just right

    this perfectly beautiful pain won't do anymore

    i'm shredding my skin.




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