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    dots Submission Name: Crown of Thornsdots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 249
    Class/Type: Poetry/Society
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    dotsCrown of Thornsdots

    There’s nothing left to know
    We’ve played every single rigmarole
    The same old story
    Thrown onto the bonfires of our prayers

    Now the ghosts of our past
    Mumble in Hollywords
    A ritual scrounged in gold
    From the cadavers of our dreams

    We were angels once
    Hippies of a love generation
    Who sold itself to glorified punk
    And bought the tanks of commercialised war

    All we wanted was more
    More and more
    And never stopped to count the cost
    In the silent blood of the Earth

    Now we sleep in this realm of plasticised cocoons
    The firelights fogged in cities
    With the same old stories
    Thrown onto the bonfires of our prayers

    A time, a western century, where we limp in shame
    Through our history
    When the killers philosophy
    Beggars us by the acquisitions of its luxury

    And now; there is nothing left to know or do
    In mere improvement
    Our technical wizards
    Repeat this addiction to ourselves

    But still, we hear in the distance of our comfort
    The empty growl of a starving child’s stomach
    And every mouthful is tainted
    By conscience

    The bitter weeping of our smiles
    Gawk from the mirrors and shopping malls
    Screaming from this
    The generation of entertainment

    We have become the voodoo of wealth
    The rag doll mothers and babies
    Crucified with our hammers and nails
    Carry the suffering of the world in our crown of thorns

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